I admit
I thought about you
when I shut my wide mind-eyes.
I chuckled and said:
Oh darn,
how she lures them
with primly pure feelings;
vividly intimate disa-
sters; sad
clowns; scandalous
veggies; innocent
rape; and purely
primal feelings;
to trap them in her fake conspiracy.
I chuckled more and then slept.
16 comments:
And you had no dreams when you slept? Of scandalous veggies?
atrax formidabilis?
Yikes! Whatever inspired you...
Jewaira,
I love it when your genuine emotions finds its way through the keyboard :)
And be nice, don't say yikes :P Every individual soul is unique and beautiful, including the soul of an atrax formidabilis.
Yikes is a word that expresses failure to acheive appreciation ;)
I re-read the poem and then wondered about the title. The image hit me hard, I must admit.
I am full of appreciation :-)
Glad you enjoyed it J :)
never knew 'rape' can be perceived as an act of pure innocence...
i guess if the raped one enjoyed it, but opted to mask that emotion.. hmm..
and you? unlureable?
and what part made you chuckle if I may ask?
L.R. --
Anything is possible if both the writer and reader enjoy open mindness. Literal meaning is not the only communication method.
Anonymous --
1st Q: I'd like to think that I'm "unlureable." I wouldn't know though if I was lured, would I?
2nd Q: I didn't chuckle. The narrator did. I guess he sensed a mixed feeling of pride, joy and admiration for his finding as well as the luring method she uses. If you find out for sure the reason behind the chuckle please share it with us.
I hope you enjoyed reading it.
Atrax? sad clowns? Scandalous veggies?
lol!
lol...Harmonie22 --
I see your fine reading skills led you to the discovery of the humorous dimention.
In a way, it is a tragical circus.
I've wanted to comment on this so often but it's hard to do so without appearing presumptuous.
Anyway I love it.
June --
Welcome back :)
I'm really glad you loved it.
Please take your liberties while commenting here. "appearing presumptuous" is not bad as long as you're not.
Anyway, you can't get more presumptuous than the narrator in this poem. O ba3dain isn't it your job as a lawyer to be presumptuous? :P
Come more often and say whatever you wish :)
As a lawyer, I have to rely on evidence, evidence and more evidence and never presume anything. Hence my reluctance to give anything away. I'm hardwired that way now.
But I am presumptuous in that I get the feeling the narrator is speaking directly to me. And the narcissist in me loves that.
I confess: I like reading your replies to reader comments as much as your wordistic works:)
June --
How do you know for sure the narrator was not speaking to you directly???!
Sherry--
I confess: I hold a strong belief that you -being a loyal reader of mine- should comment more often on my work because it makes me happy :P
Now you're just messing with my head. Well done for appealing to the narcissist in me. Congratulations on winning over yet another loyal fan.
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